Naziya’s Feedback 20th March

‘Just the Game’ Documentary’
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· It is a very unique idea, something new which no one has done in GHS. I also believe it is a contemporary issue which you can tackle.
· Your montage at the beginning is brilliant, it is very eye-catching. This is good because it gains the audience’s attention.
· Us of archive image is also good as it shows you have done background research.
· Your interviews are good, the shots are done are good, also the fact that the interviewee is not looking straight at the camera.
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· Try to speed up the montage slightly with upbeat music.
· You need to now use your music it is very crucial that you do, as it is your main object of the production and all your shots need to flow well.
· Re-shoot some of your shots in the interview, because they are many types of shoot. It needs to flow continuously. Try to have the same shot throughout.
· In the interview try to have titles coming out, and images of what the interviewee is saying, because the audience does not want to see the interviews face all the time.
· Get other people’s view on ‘games’, do this as a vox pop and make it speedy
· In one of your interview try to get someone playing playstaion X box at the back.

Rupal’s Group (Documentary on Music career)
· First of all you need to get rid of the credits that you have added in at the beginning of the production. This should always be at the end, once your production is completed.
· Leave a gap at the beginning for your institution.
· The title of your documentary name needs to be more ‘in the audiences face’. Make it stand out more.
· In your vox pop get titles coming out to the screen, as this will attract the audience and make it look creative.
· Overall, keep working on it, and it is looking really good.

Anum’s Yasmin and Sunania’s group (Documentary on Rape) (sorry if I have spelt anyone’s name wrong)
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· I think the idea that you are focusing on is really good. It is a topic that needs to be talked in the society today
· The other day (Tue) we done a shot of the victim. This was really good as we got a brilliant silhouette of your friend, and it creates enigma for the audience. Also it is following the conventions of a documentary.
· I like the idea of the split screen, it shows a mixture of people’s views and opinions towards the issue.
I haven’t seen much of your footage, so maybe if you show me what you have got i can probably give you more ideas. Overall, it’s looking good so keep up the hard work.

Asain Invasion (Hardeep and Asa)
· I really like the whole idea of tour montage it is looking eye catching and brilliant. The music goes well with it, it is very upbeat and attracts the TA immediately (even though ASA accused me of ruining the music) L
· I like the idea of the black and white effect on peoples view, or I think it was when you were representing Britain before. It shows how people used to view stuff back in the days.
· You are focusing on both historical and contemporary issues such as ‘Amritsar Massacre’ Aamir Khan, Cricket and so on. These are the issues that attract the TA so keep up.
· I think your documentary so far is looking good. I haven’t seen much, but try to get as much as you can done.

Kuch to Hua hai (Bollywood Trailer 1) (Saba, Priyanka, Madina and Natasha)
· You were told to re-shoot a lot of your footage. I saw what you done to Priyanka, it is looking AMAZING. I hope you have captured and shot other footage which we had discussed amongst us.
· Remember to make it more ‘Bollywood’, and less Western. We know that you want to subvert the genre, but Bollywood is always colourful. J
· The music you chose was EXCELLENT. It’s not only new and successful but runs well with you footage.
· By the end of the week try to get some footage all gathered so we can have a look. Also it would be nice if all the group members came, so we can all get together and discuss what we can do next.
· It’s looking good, huge amount of improvement keep up the hard work.

Pyar ki Ek Kahani (Bollywood trailer 2)
· Your opening is really good. It’s very ‘Bollywood’ and attracts your TA well. Well done.
· You need to re shoot a few shot. We discussed the males role (I forgot his name lol) get a shot of him, showing his personality off, how he is.
· You need to research your music. I think the one i had gave you fits in well. But I also have got a few more.
· It was good to see all the group members together. Try to come together so we can negotiate more ideas
· I have just seen this much, hope your getting on well. Also i like the effects you have used. (dissolves)
· Keep up the work. I think both teams are doing well.

Amits, Ajitpal, Avi and Nabil’s group.
· A lot of improvement is seen, which is excellent. You have got brilliant shots and are working hard, and playing around with different effects.
· I haven’t seen a lot, but your ideas are really good.
· Nabil you need to put your input into this, and get off the internet. Gives your thoughts on what sort of effect will look best.
· I tip to all the group members, your working good compared to last time, it will be best if you had or made a story board it will save you a lot of time.
· Try to come all together as a group so you all can say what you think.

xxNaziyaXx