Progress so far!!

ATHAR'S FEEDBACK

A Rappers Ambition:
Amit, Nabil, Ajitpal, Avi

First of all i honestly had a few doubts about the direction your production was taking, but now i think your production is looking really good.

Strong points:

• You guys got a clear idea of what you need in order to make your production successful.
• Im really liking the fact that your using current trailers of big movies (Get rich or die trying, 8 Mile) to understand the conventions of this kind of genre.
• Also every one of you turns up and makes some sort of a contribution to the group which is one factor that will really help your group do well.
• The commitment level in this group is also excellent, i rarely see you guys talking about irrelevant things!!! also keep up the positive atmosphere as its essential in order for you guys to achieve the best you can.
• You' re also probably the only group at the moment making full use of the editing software and that could really help make your production stand out.

Targets:

• The issues with the footage you need to shoot!!!
• Make sure you have more than enough footage just incase!!

Nothing else really to say besides that, keep up all the good work !!!

Horror Trailer:
Nafisa, Rajan, Simmren

At this moment in time, your trailer is looking exceptionally good!! i was really impressed with the footage you have but i still think you've got some way to go yet. However you have a really solid base to work on now and just keep up all the hard work !!

Strong points:

• Really far ahead in terms of footage and sequencing
• Always come in as a group and discuss properly
• Really good footage to work with
• The heartbeat sequence, looks really professionally done!!
• Brilliant acting rajan !!! and good choice of music also !!

Targets:

• Like i discussed with your group when Mrs Jones was there, i think you just need to view other horror trailers. Obviously don't copy them fully as you want to keep originality in your work, but instead borrow certain conventions from them!! referencing back to successful horror films will help you out alot when it comes to your evaluation!!!
• The opening scene, not as many shots needed of the trees, try something slightly different!! as theres eerie music in the back, you could even have people socialising together to show a contrast and create an enigma!!
• Much faster cuts towards the end of the trailer, just to up the pace and grip the audience.

Besides all this, your group in terms of progress is far ahead of most others and therefore you just need to keep up the hard work!! well done!!

The Gaming Documentary:
Jonathan, Bhaven.... and sorry the rest of the guys, i haven't actually seen you guys to learn your names yet !!!

Your documentary is coming along pretty good at the moment!! The idea is really original and very good as its relevant to society today !!

Strong points:

• In this group everyone is putting in alot of effort but i would single out johnathan for the additional effort he is putting in. well done for that
• Your vox pops are nice and clear and a really good sequence
• Archive footage is brilliant!!! really really good !! but possibly look to get footage from other games as well.. unless your looking to base it around a few games mainly

Targets:

• Some scenes definitely need re-shooting to make sure they fit within them specific screen boundaries
• Statistics and an interview with a professional are almost essential for a documentary. Documentaries are informative and these things are the main things that give a documentary its credibility so make sure you get them
• Also try out that montage sequence i recommended you. The one of people actually playing games. If you need a better idea of what i was trying to say then come to me anytime and i'll guide you through it. If you were to use that as an opening sequence, would look brilliant !!!
• Remember its a collaborative effort, and therefore all team members should be present when big decisions about editing need to be made

On the whole, your documentary is coming along pretty well so therefore just keep putting the hours in!!

Music Career Documentary
Vipesh's Group!!

Your group was a tad shakey for a while but i think its getting together good now.

Strong points:

• Footage gives a really authentic and realistic feel, therefore making your documentary alot more credible
• Good sense of direction in where the documentary's going and a reasonably good idea of the structure
• High amount of commitment towards this subject soo again well done !!

Targets:

• Your group has to ensure that every one has a good amount of contribution and that decisions are made together, not individually as there should not be any conflict!!
• Make sure you got a clearr structure for your work and know roughly what scenes you require
• Statistics and expert opinion, possibly if you really can, get someone famous to interview!!!

Keep up all the hard work, and well done to your group for putting in a lot of commitment!!

Music Careers Documentary:
Rupals Group:

Good start to your documentary!! Ive only seen one member of your group soo far though but hopefully everyones putting in alot of effort!!

Strong points:

• Good and most importantly, CONCISE interviews. Really good footage there to work with
• Vox pops are coming along really well, wide selection of them also!!
• Good footage of your protagonist, the storyline is coming along well!!!
• opening scene is well constructed !!

Targets:

• Make sure you have a clear storyline and know where your documentary is heading
• Ensure you understand the purpose of the documentary properly in order to be able to successfully give ur points to your target audience
• Try to film more scenes of people playing instruments as they could be used for cutaway images!! interviews can come across as a bit too long sometimes and therefore cut away images will keep the audiences interested!!

On the whole well done with your documentary and keep up the good work!!!

Drugs and Crime Documentary!!
Indy, George and Jagtar

Strong points:

• Good structure, everyone knows what the form and function of the documentary is and also how its going to pan out
• Really good and gripping opening scene !!! Really good choice of music for it
• Shots of the drugs zoom in really fast and before that the shots of the streets are slightly dizzy looking..... really goood stuff there !! almost creating the effect of the drug itself!!!

Targets:

• Just to make sure you have enough footage
• Also to ensure your purpose for the documentary is being achieved throughout
• The interview with the "bitty" adds alot of realism and thats good footage!!

Ive only seen your opening scene so far, but continue that with the rest and you;ll have a really good documentary !!! and Unlucky about your computerr... SAVE every 2 minutes !! lol

Homosexuals in London Documentary
Sophia and Alka's Group

By far the most original idea of any group and that possibly could have made it tough, but your group looks exceptionally strong.

Strong points:

• Opening sequence and the vox pops are very well done !!
• The point of view of a gay person gives your documentary a very authentic feel !!!
• Good and creative ideas of how to structure the documentary and its looking quite professional at the moment
• really good song choice !! suits the whole documentary !!

Targets:

• Interviews with professional or experts and stats to back up your argument
• Ensure you have some sort of a structure to follow

I haven't actually seen too much footage of your group, but so far its looking really good!! the opening sequence is catchy and your work is also edited very well !!

THESE ARE THE ONLY GROUPS I HAVE VIEWED SO FAR. SORRY TO THE GROUPS I HAVE NOT SEEN YET. PLEASE LEAVE A COMMENT ON THIS POST TELLING ME IF I HAVE NOT SEEN YOUR GROUP!!! I LOOK FORWARD TO ALSO SEEING THE BOLLYWOOD TRAILERS AND "SILENT PAIN" SEEING AS I DONE AN INTERVIEW FOR IT!!!

KEEP UP ALL THE GOOD WORK AND FEEL FREE TO COME ASK ME FOR HELP DURING THE TIMES IM IN, OR OUTSIDE EITHER!!

ATHAR